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08 April 2001 @ 07:12 pm
by popular demand  
This is the other play I wrote. It's silly needs work...

The pirates and the dancers.
The pirates are on a journey for what else pirate treasure! The treasure of a flying ship!

The dancers are a traveling band of dancers/acrobats who are trying to get money. Maybe they should have gotten paid with a treasure map sometime in the past. The treasure map leads to "Grand Line" the place where the greatest treasure exists. So the dance troop and the pirates are on an island�

Ah!! The story starts with the pirates attacking a spanish galleon and they are boarding the ship, they talk about the big bevy of people captured by the spanish. They are hoping to ransom them because they are undoubably british knobles or some such. So they open the captured cargo, and discover that it is actually an all male dance troup. The troup is called the Blazing stars. The Pirates are called "[fill in later]" I don't know.

So the pirates get the all-male dance troop and they are sad because the dance troup is not worth much. The pirates try to let the dance troup go at the nearest island, but the troup insists that they are indebted to the pirates and need to stay and help them. The Dance troup entertains the pirates with their mystical dance. Suddenly the dance is inturupted by a band of rival pirates. The pirates are taken by surprise and the rival pirates take over their ship, and lock the good pirates in the brig. The dancers have hidden them selves away. But they make a plan to save the good pirates.

We come back and find the new pirates ( who abandoned their old ship because it was old and running out of supplies.) looking at a map they have leading to "grand line". The dancers come and tell them that they were slaves of the pirates and that they are a dance troup, and that they will dance for them as thanks for freing them from the pirates. So, The Blazing Stars dance and distract the the other pirates and first one dancer leaves and rescues the pirates, then the pirates come and tie up the bad pirates. Then the pirates and the dancers look at the map and figure out how to go to grandline. And they do.

(if the story isn't already over) They all get to grand line, and find the cave where the treasure is hidden. Then they find a ghost guarding the treasure. They deal with the ghost by doing something. Then they open the treasure, and discover that the treasure are the best cookies ever! And they eat them all up.

Things to fix:
More incidents,
Specific parts
More conflict&humor ( the concept is innane, but it dosent make sense to not have the show be as funny.)

Then there's the musical comedy I'mthinking of writitng with max about a trisexual man who dosent know what the third thing he's attracted to is. but, that's still in the works.
Current Mood: tiredtired
Current Music: Furi Kuri OST1 (Kabarofski) - Yorii Gallop
Jack Shadowsjiffyclub on April 8th, 2001 08:07 pm (UTC)
I think a female dance troupe would be more romantic, but maybe that's just me. Pirates and dancers... hmmmm. The noble pirate, anti-hero of the high seas! Like the captain guy in Chrono Cross. Neat. But a sophisticated bunch of female dancers might work better.
MegaMan: Luffy Crackmegaman on April 8th, 2001 09:36 pm (UTC)
Re: Subjectless
the reason why the dancers are male is because first, this is for 3rd graders to perform in 15 minutes, and second, my boss and I thought it would be nice to break out of normal gender stereotypes, because then everyone has a turn, and their parents think we're being PC.

although at first I thought it would be funny to call the male dance troup "the flaming stars"

hahah flaming!

p.s. I only got like 5 hours into chrono cross, so dont spoil any of it for me.
Jack Shadowsjiffyclub on April 8th, 2001 10:18 pm (UTC)
Re: Subjectless
Hehe, PC is such a lost cause. Wait, let me rephrase that, I don't really believe in lost causes. It's an unlikely cause. Better.

With a time frame of 15 minutes, that makes more sense. I can see that. And the 3rd graders. Yes, I see...
Siner Dsirnerd on April 8th, 2001 08:57 pm (UTC)
i think the dancers should stay male, because pirates are pirates. and a close relationship has a higher chance of happening with a male dance troup especially after swabbing the poop deck, and plundering booty together.
Jesus Northbahia on April 8th, 2001 09:05 pm (UTC)
sexy female dancers would be yum!

you should write anime, yo.